Find whats wrong with this Press Release

CMIII · 10-09-2013, 03:17 PM

Find whats wrong with this statement

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Mighty master of marketing Scott “Toy Guru” Neitlich will reveal the latest news about Mattel collector lines Masters of the Universe® Classics, DC Universe, and Ghostbusters™. He will also reveal several upcoming figures and fans will get the chance to cast their vote for a 2015 New Adventures 6″ figure; Mara, Darius, or Tuskador. (Even if a figure doesn’t win the fan vote for 2015, it might appear in the 2016 line!)

I think it's the

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Mighty Master of Marketing

Snowflakian · 10-09-2013, 04:42 PM

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Originally Posted by CMIII

I think it's the

It should be:

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Mighty master of marketing, Scott “Toy Guru” Neitlich, will reveal the latest news about Mattel collector lines Masters of the Universe® Classics, DC Universe, and Ghostbusters™. He will also reveal several upcoming figures and fans will get the chance to cast their vote for a 2015 New Adventures 6″ figure; Mara, Darius, or Tuskador. (Even if a figure doesn’t win the fan vote for 2015, it might appear in the 2016 line!)

CMIII · 10-09-2013, 04:56 PM

if he's the master of marketing I am next in line for the throne in England

trebleshot · 10-10-2013, 07:10 AM

Aside from grammar and/or punctuation, I don't see anything wrong with it. If you also consider the fact that he got a lot of people to buy toys that they hadn't seen yet and maybe didn't want just so they could make sure that they got the ones they actually wanted, I'd say he'd pretty damn good at marketing.

It also could very well be sarcastic irony.

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Originally Posted by Snowflakian

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I don't think you need the second comma, since Scott is the actual subject of the sentence. Personally, I think they should have written it this way:

"Scott 'Toy Guru' Neitlich, mighty master of marketing, will reveal...."

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Originally Posted by CMIII

if he's the master of marketing I am next in line for the throne in England

So you're really Prince Charles?! :O

CMIII · 10-10-2013, 09:32 AM

If he was as good as that self indlugent ego boost claimed he would have been able to sell the stuff without making videos. The only thing mighty about Mattel is how mighty the losses will be in 2014

10-09-2013, 03:17 PM	#1
CMIII Join Date: Sep 2011 Location: Isla Nublar Posts: 1,778	Find whats wrong with this statement Quote: Mighty master of marketing Scott “Toy Guru” Neitlich will reveal the latest news about Mattel collector lines Masters of the Universe® Classics, DC Universe, and Ghostbusters™. He will also reveal several upcoming figures and fans will get the chance to cast their vote for a 2015 New Adventures 6″ figure; Mara, Darius, or Tuskador. (Even if a figure doesn’t win the fan vote for 2015, it might appear in the 2016 line!) I think it's the Quote: Mighty Master of Marketing __________________ Everyone fears the Mighty Tyrannosaurus.... Last edited by CMIII; 10-09-2013 at 04:54 PM..

10-09-2013, 04:42 PM	#2
Snowflakian Illyria's New Qwa'ha Xahn Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: In the clouds. Posts: 4,120	Quote: Originally Posted by CMIII I think it's the It should be: Quote: Mighty master of marketing, Scott “Toy Guru” Neitlich, will reveal the latest news about Mattel collector lines Masters of the Universe® Classics, DC Universe, and Ghostbusters™. He will also reveal several upcoming figures and fans will get the chance to cast their vote for a 2015 New Adventures 6″ figure; Mara, Darius, or Tuskador. (Even if a figure doesn’t win the fan vote for 2015, it might appear in the 2016 line!) __________________

10-09-2013, 04:56 PM	#3
CMIII Join Date: Sep 2011 Location: Isla Nublar Posts: 1,778	if he's the master of marketing I am next in line for the throne in England __________________ Everyone fears the Mighty Tyrannosaurus....

10-10-2013, 07:10 AM	#4
trebleshot Dark Lord of the 'Ark Join Date: Oct 2008 Location: Ohio Posts: 8,224	Aside from grammar and/or punctuation, I don't see anything wrong with it. If you also consider the fact that he got a lot of people to buy toys that they hadn't seen yet and maybe didn't want just so they could make sure that they got the ones they actually wanted, I'd say he'd pretty damn good at marketing. It also could very well be sarcastic irony. Quote: Originally Posted by Snowflakian It should be: I don't think you need the second comma, since Scott is the actual subject of the sentence. Personally, I think they should have written it this way: "Scott 'Toy Guru' Neitlich, mighty master of marketing, will reveal...." Quote: Originally Posted by CMIII if he's the master of marketing I am next in line for the throne in England So you're really Prince Charles?! :O __________________ Last edited by trebleshot; 10-10-2013 at 07:22 AM..

10-10-2013, 09:32 AM	#5
CMIII Join Date: Sep 2011 Location: Isla Nublar Posts: 1,778	If he was as good as that self indlugent ego boost claimed he would have been able to sell the stuff without making videos. The only thing mighty about Mattel is how mighty the losses will be in 2014 __________________ Everyone fears the Mighty Tyrannosaurus....

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